Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems.to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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caused by

environment

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environmental

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pollutant and housing issues has become increasingly

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common

people claim that to avoid sickness,

government

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the government

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should allocate more attention

on

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declining contamination from

environment

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the environment

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and accommodation problems.

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essay will argue

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why decreasing habitat corruption and home issues

are

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completely necessary ,

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however

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there are more elements that should

be consider

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. In the one hand habitat pollution and housing contamination have been always a serious matter

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these are the main causes for spreadable diseases in across the continent , they are forming severe damage to health problem not only for human safety but they are

also

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have a huge detrimental effects on animals and seas condition .

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waste water and excrement conveyed in sewers which released into the lakes and ocean have had considerably destructive impact on seas life,

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it likely to have negative cause on food chain as well. for these reasons government should focus on

environment

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and accommodation waste products.

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hand

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there are far more sources for

expending

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expanding

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harmful diseases which need to

take

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in to

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into

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account. Air pollution can lead to respiratory and breathing problems or in the worst condition it can provoke lung cancers. Pesticides and chemical fumes which emission into the open air are two main

reason

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of

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dreadful sicknesses .

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instance

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people

whom

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live near facilities are suffering from dangerous bronchial problems .

therefore

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it will be critical matters that need to find

solution

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by

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governments. In

conclusion

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this

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essay

argued

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that authorities have to hinder disorders and sickness that

coming

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come

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from habitat and household defilement , in my

opinion

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the

mention

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causes need to

prevent

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, it will

compulsory

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and entirely acceptable to cut down other contamination derivations.