Some people say that the internet is the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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It is true that we are in a digital age. Some
people
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say that because of the
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internet
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all
people
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can communicate with one another easily around the world. I totally agree with
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statement because we can contact anyone live in a minute if both parties have
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internet
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connection.
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digital era helps to
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everyone globally. We can see
people
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use smart devices more often than earlier, even young kids
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use their own devices to connect with others.
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, communication
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easier than before.
Older
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days, if we
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to communicate with someone in a different city or country we had to send them
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mail
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, it normally took
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one month.
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process was quite difficult and sometimes broke relationships
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each other.
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,
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people
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for people
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familiar with the
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communication is more interesting and easy.
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, if someone working abroad
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will help him to connect with his family members, loved ones and friends. They can get instant
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from them
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they can have video calls. WhatsApp, email, Facebook,
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and Viber
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these kinds of apps will help
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with easy
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communication methods.
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, like everything has pros and cons
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is
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the same. Nowadays we can see most of the young generation addicted to social media, it is not good for their physical health and it leads them apart from their families and social relationships. When they have free time they use Facebook, Instagram, TikTok, etc.
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of
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,
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generation lives away from their family and friends. In conclusion, the
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benefits outweigh the disadvantages so, the user has to control how much he uses
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internet
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the internet
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and how
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he balances his social life and family life.
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there is no doubt the
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connect
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connects
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people
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together and it makes our task easy.
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