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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The given line graph illustrates details concerning the average
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 per individual of carbon dioxide in the four countries from 1967 to 2007. Generally, it is obvious witness that the United Kingdom constantly remained the most carbon dioxide
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 during the 40 years. What's more, Sweden was the second most country in the first decade but afterwards it became the least
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 nation of the four countries.
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 but not least, Italy and Portugal were consistently incline their emission in the duration. Upon closer examination of the data, the United Kingdom emitted over 10
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 in 1967, after a continuous downward, the
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 declined to about 9
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. on the other side, Sweden was 8
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 in 1967, and it soared to 10 after a decade,
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, it started to drop from 1977 to 2007 with 5
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.
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, we can observe that Italy was 4
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 in 1967 and remained upward in 40 years to be 7
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. Portugal has the same upward curve, it started at 1 ton, ultimately grew to 5
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, which is just over Sweden'emission in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, tonnes, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average emissions per person
  • trends
  • reduction
  • increase
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • pivotal years
  • industrial growth
  • policy changes
  • economic changes
  • energy sources
  • technology advancements
  • environmental policies
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