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You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include •Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaints

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Dear Sir or Madam,
This
 Is Islam Mohamed, one of your hotel guests. I am writing
this
 letter regarding many issues which I faced during my stay at the hotel from
21th
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 June to 25th June.
To begin
 with, I have stayed for 4 nights
at
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 room number 235 to attend the international medical conference with my company. Unfortunately, I had a bad experience with the facilities in my room.
Furthermore
, the air conditioner was in
a
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bad condition, the furniture was very old, and there was no hot water in the bathroom.
Therefore
, I phoned the receptionist to ask him to fix these
issue
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, but I was not satisfied with his actions.
Finally
, as you are a
well reputed
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 hotel, I feel that the best course of action to deal with
this
 is to fix these problems as soon as possible because my company is going to
held
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 another conference next month. I look forward to hearing from you, and your prompt response in
this
 matter is greatly appreciated. Faithfully yours, Islam Mohamed
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