In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others the do not have to start shool until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of theese views?
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countries
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age
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countries
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at
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age
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view point
in forthcoming paragraphs.
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viewpoint
belive
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believe
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firstly
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children
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children's
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at
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comapare
to the Correct your spelling
compare
compared
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older
age
. Use synonyms
moreover
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age
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children
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such
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waked
up Change the form of the verb
waking
in
early time get ready for school Change preposition
apply
everday
so they will follow Correct your spelling
everyday
every day
this
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an
age
and they will live their life Use synonyms
how
we teach them. Correct word choice
as
however
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their universities when they cross Wrong verb form
start
teen
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teenage
age
.
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On the other hand
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of
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apply
countries
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allowing
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allow
children
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countries
and Europe Use synonyms
children
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,
when they start their grades they Remove the comma
apply
already
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are already
familar
with the environment but Correct your spelling
familiar
in
that Change preposition
at
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age
they will feel little difficulty Add a comma
,age
beacuse
mind is Correct your spelling
because
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in that case
they will learn what they want to.
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its
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and cons. But Correct your spelling
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