In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others the do not have to start shool until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of theese views?

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some in few
countries
they are allowing
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to start
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school
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the
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of four but some
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age
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of seven.
i
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will discuss my
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in forthcoming paragraphs. On the first hand, there are some reasons why people
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to start
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schooling
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in
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firstly
,
children
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mind is developing
in
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that
age
so, offspring can learn easily as
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compare
compared
to the
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age
.
moreover
,
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in
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early
age
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children
will follow the daily routine
such
as,
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up
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early time get ready for school
everday
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every day
so they will follow
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in
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early
age
and they will live their life
how
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we teach them.
however
, they will cover their grades early and it will help them in future to finish their schooling early and
starting
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their universities when they cross
teen
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teenage
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age
.
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, some
of
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countries
allowing
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children
to start their grades when they complete seven years. Mostly in North American
countries
and Europe
children
go to Daycare where they learn basic things how to behave in class and colouring so
,
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when they start their grades they
already
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familar
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familiar
with the environment but
in
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that
age
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they will feel little difficulty
beacuse
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because
mind is
alreaddy
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already
mature enough so
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they will learn what they want to. In
nutshell
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, To start schooling
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in
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an
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early
age
and late
having
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their
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its
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own
prons
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and cons. But
i
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belive
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believe
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that starting schooling
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in
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an
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early
age
is having
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more
benfits
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benefits
as
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to
other
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others
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  • Early childhood education
  • Cognitive development
  • Social development
  • Formal education
  • Non-formal education
  • Educational outcomes
  • Cultural factors
  • Economic factors
  • Parental involvement
  • Emotional maturity
  • Academic achievement
  • Personal development
  • Educational inequalities
  • Pre-school education
  • Readiness for learning
  • Stress
  • Playtime
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