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In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others the do not have to start shool until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of theese views?

#countries #children #education #four #years #do #shool #seven #eight #theese
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 some in few
countries
 they are allowing
offsprings
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 to start
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school
in
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age
 of four but some
countries
 allowing when they are
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age
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the age
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 of seven.
i
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 will discuss my
view point
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 in forthcoming paragraphs. On the first hand, there are some reasons why people
belive
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to start
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in starting
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 schooling
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in
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an
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age
firstly
,
children
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 mind is developing
in
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 that
age
 so, offspring can learn easily as
comapare
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compare
compared
 to the
elder
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age
.
moreover
,
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in
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an
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age
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children
 will follow the daily routine
such
 as,
waked
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 up
in
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early time get ready for school
everday
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everyday
every day
 so they will follow
this
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in
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an
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age
 and they will live their life
how
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 we teach them.
however
, they will cover their grades early and it will help them in future to finish their schooling early and
starting
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 their universities when they cross
teen
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teenage
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age
.
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, some
of
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countries
allowing
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children
 to start their grades when they complete seven years. Mostly in North American
countries
 and Europe
children
 go to Daycare where they learn basic things how to behave in class and colouring so
,
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 when they start their grades they
already
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familar
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familiar
 with the environment but
in
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age
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 they will feel little difficulty
beacuse
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because
 mind is
alreaddy
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already
 mature enough so
in that case
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, in that case,
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 they will learn what they want to. In
nutshell
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, To start schooling
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in
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an
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 early
age
 and late
having
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their
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its
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 own
prons
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pros
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 and cons. But
i
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belive
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believe
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 that starting schooling
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in
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an
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age
is having
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has
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 more
benfits
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benefits
 as
compare
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 to
other
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others
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