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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates how instant
noodles
 are produced and packed for
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the sellig
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sellig
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selling
 process in stores in 8 stages,
wich
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i
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 am going to explain in
this
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Firstly
, the transfer trucks ship the floor from storage silos to the
noodle producing
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noodle-producing
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 factory.
To begin
, the process starts by adding water and oil to the floor and
put
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 it in mixers. After mixing
floor
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the floor
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 with water and oil, the rollers make dough sheets from the mixed liquids
and after than
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After that
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 the dough sheets get cut and
dough
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the dough
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 strips are ready for
alteration
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procces
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process
 and become noodle discs in the fifth stage.
On
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 the next phase, the
noodles
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 discs will
get
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 cooked in oil and
then
dryed
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dried
.
The next step is
 to put
dryed
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dry
 and cooked
noodles
 in the cups and add vegetables and spices to them.
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last
 part of the
procces
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process
, the machine would add
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a label
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label
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 to the cups and seal them to get ready for leaving the factory and get
transfered
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transferred
 to the markets. In conclusion, it is a long and hard process to produce
noodles
 and get them ready for selling in the markets.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
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