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The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of various age groups frequently went to the gym from 1990 to 2010.

The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of various age groups frequently went to the gym from 1990 to 2010.
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The provided diagram presents data on the participation of four different
age
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 groups in Europe in
gym
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 attendance, at least once a month, from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in the percentage of
gym
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 visits over the three-decade period between 1990 and 2010. In 1990, individuals aged 25 to 34 exhibited the highest likelihood of visiting the
gym
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 within a month.
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, by 1998, the 18-24
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group
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 surpassed the 25-34
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group
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 in terms of
gym
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 attendance, and
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 trend continued
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. The percentage of
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 participation among the 18-24
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group
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 reached its peak in 2006.
Subsequently
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, it experienced a significant decline until 2008 before starting to rise again. Despite these fluctuations, the 18-24
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group
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 remained the most frequent visitors to the
gym
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 throughout the entire period.
On the other hand
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, both of the elderly
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 groups saw a steady increase in
gym
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 presence over the years.
However
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, by the end of 2010, their popularity ranking had not changed compared to 1990.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, gym, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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