Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many people suppose that good
manner
should be taught to children by Fix the agreement mistake
manners
parents
, while
others claim that creating an affable kid is a resbonsibility
of school. In my opinion, Correct your spelling
responsibility
elder
generation at home should construct the background of a child in order to be Correct article usage
the elder
well mannered
. Add a hyphen
well-mannered
However
, school have an impact of
a child's social responsibility and other Change preposition
on
etiqette
rules. The following essay points out both views.
To start with, to be a good citizen of a country Correct your spelling
etiquette
parents
should put a base of good manners for their offsprings
. Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
Moreover
it was proven by scientists that, about 60% of our behaving ways Add a comma
Moreover,
plays
a crucial role Correct subject-verb agreement
play
on
Change preposition
in
growth
of a child's discipline. As an example, when someone from Add an article
the growth
old
generation Correct article usage
the old
visit
their house, Change the verb form
visits
parents
should always be polite towards them regarding to show
Change the verb form
showing
a
good manner Correct article usage
apply
behaviors
for children. Change the spelling
behaviours
Hence
, these small demonstrations will always leave positive foot-prints
in a young Correct your spelling
footprints
ones
mind.
Change noun form
one's
Whereas
other people,
argue that should raise students and teach Remove the comma
apply
how
to become Correct pronoun usage
them how
a
good Correct article usage
apply
person
. It can give some qualities to students Fix the agreement mistake
people
such
as responsibility or managing time in its cirriculum
. Correct your spelling
curriculum
For instance
, there are subjects like moral science in private schools, that teaches
etiquette Correct subject-verb agreement
teach
manners
. Correct word choice
and manners
Thus
, school
makes civility background stronger by teaching additional skills.
To put it in a nutshell, the foundation of a good individual in Add an article
the school
the
society Correct article usage
apply
have
to be laid by the Change the verb form
has
parents
. So, teachers can teach points of being well mannered, however
Add a comma
however,
parents
are the one
who can show them by giving example themselves.Correct pronoun usage
ones
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