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The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table portrays
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the
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 of
people
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 who came upon seeing the
museum
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 prior to and after it was renovated. The pie chart describes the results of Voyager and their feedback.
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, the table and the chart represent the
people
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's opinions under certain criteria. It has been clearly shown that before renovation the number of individuals visited was less when compared to renewable museums. Most of the public was disappointed in
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museum
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. About 40 per cent of
people
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 responded dissatisfied.
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, when compared to the reconstructed
museum
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 35 per cent of
people
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 expressed very satisfaction. Comparing both reviews it has been found that the reconstructed
museum
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 was liked by all individuals. In my ,opinion about 5 per cent of
people
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 do not provide any response to the survey.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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