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Some people believe the mass media have too much influence over people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 feel that mass
media
 like
news
, the
internet
, etc., would make a large impact on citizens, but a few would think that broadcasting
media
 does not influence at all. I partially agree, that individuals can get easily affected by the
news
 or the
internet
 which is happening all around the world.
Firstly
,
the
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 greater amount of
people
 perceive that
media
 can decide the state of mind of the
people
.
Moreover
, As far as the present generation is concerned they have become addicted to mobile phones massively so that they can get easily influenced by false
news
 and fake information being spread via the
internet
 and
news
media
.
Furthermore
, If misinformation spreads rapidly, possibly it can create chaos and eventually it may lead to social unrest and there is a chance that society will get disturbed and influenced.
Although
 the
Internet
 provides a vast amount of useful resources at the same time it can be harmful if we use it irresponsibly.
For example
, In a recent survey, It has been established that there is a potential of getting psychological and social issues in the frequent
internet
 users.
On the other hand
, few individuals
do not
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have any opinion on
Internet
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 and mass
media
 influencing society. Few of the individuals does not show interest towards social
media
 or any broadcast service because they are fitter mentally and they will not get influenced effortlessly.
However
,
people
 consume
news
 and
internet
 content, but only a handful of
people
 will not affected.
For instance
, my friend even though he watches TV and reads newspapers, would see the world
in
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 a neutral perspective.
To conclude
, though susceptibility to mass
media
 varies from person to person, a maximum percentage of society is influenced by the
internet
 and information consumed through
news
 articles.
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