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Some people believe the mass media have too much influence over people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #mass #media #influence
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Many
people
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 feel that mass
media
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 like
news
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, the
internet
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, etc., would make a large impact on citizens, but a few would think that broadcasting
media
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 does not influence at all. I partially agree, that individuals can get easily affected by the
news
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 or the
internet
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 which is happening all around the world.
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,
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 greater amount of
people
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 perceive that
media
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 can decide the state of mind of the
people
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.
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, As far as the present generation is concerned they have become addicted to mobile phones massively so that they can get easily influenced by false
news
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 and fake information being spread via the
internet
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 and
news
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media
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.
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, If misinformation spreads rapidly, possibly it can create chaos and eventually it may lead to social unrest and there is a chance that society will get disturbed and influenced.
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 the
Internet
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 provides a vast amount of useful resources at the same time it can be harmful if we use it irresponsibly.
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, In a recent survey, It has been established that there is a potential of getting psychological and social issues in the frequent
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 users.
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, few individuals
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have any opinion on
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Internet
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 and mass
media
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 influencing society. Few of the individuals does not show interest towards social
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 or any broadcast service because they are fitter mentally and they will not get influenced effortlessly.
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,
people
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 consume
news
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 and
internet
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 content, but only a handful of
people
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 will not affected.
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, my friend even though he watches TV and reads newspapers, would see the world
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 a neutral perspective.
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, though susceptibility to mass
media
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 varies from person to person, a maximum percentage of society is influenced by the
internet
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 and information consumed through
news
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 articles.
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