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in the future all cars buses and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vechiles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of diverless vechiles outweigh the disadvantages.

The day when all of the vehicles are driverless is not that far from us and that raises the question of whether it is worth letting computers drive our
cars
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 or not.
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 there are a couple of downsides here, I believe there are more advantages and it really would be a positive change. On one hand, there
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 some negative facts
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 letting computers take the steering wheel.
Firstly
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, a lot of people work with their
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,
busses
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 and motorcycles and they would be dismissed from their jobs.
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, Snapp is a successful application which provides all sorts of taxies and deliveries to the citizens of Iran.
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 entertainment facilities like Afqanistan, it has unfortunately become a hobby for people to drive around the city and even sometimes, race in the streets.
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, there are unclear legal issues with autonomous
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 and
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 why we rarely see any driverless car in our cities even though we have the technology. So, we will need to resolve these issues
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 there will be chaos in our towns.
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, there are more upsides in my opinion. It will make our lives easier by saving us
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time.
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, we'll have less traffic and a more organized city because of how
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 we will be able to program our computers and
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, we'll probably have
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 polluted environment.
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, roads are going to be safer because there would be no mad drunk
driver
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who's
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 actually in a hurry.
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 death in many countries around the world.
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, thanks to technology, we are going to have autonomous
cars
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 and
busses
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 sooner or later and
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 we can mention a few possible problems they'll cause, I believe there are many more reasons why we should employ them and indeed, they can be beneficial.

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