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in the future all cars buses and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vechiles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of diverless vechiles outweigh the disadvantages.

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The day when all of the vehicles are driverless is not that far from us and that raises the question of whether it is worth letting computers drive our
cars
 or not.
Although
 there are a couple of downsides here, I believe there are more advantages and it really would be a positive change. On one hand, there
is
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 some negative facts
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 letting computers take the steering wheel.
Firstly
, a lot of people work with their
cars
,
busses
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 and motorcycles and they would be dismissed from their jobs.
For instance
, Snapp is a successful application which provides all sorts of taxies and deliveries to the citizens of Iran.
Secondly
, in a country will
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 entertainment facilities like Afqanistan, it has unfortunately become a hobby for people to drive around the city and even sometimes, race in the streets.
Finally
, there are unclear legal issues with autonomous
cars
 and
that is
 why we rarely see any driverless car in our cities even though we have the technology. So, we will need to resolve these issues
otherwise
 there will be chaos in our towns.
On the other hand
, there are more upsides in my opinion. It will make our lives easier by saving us
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time.
Moreover
, we'll have less traffic and a more organized city because of how
accurate
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 we will be able to program our computers and
thus
, we'll probably have
less
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 polluted environment.
Furthermore
, roads are going to be safer because there would be no mad drunk
driver
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 actually in a hurry.
For instance
, road accidents are in fact the most prevalent reason
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 death in many countries around the world.
To conclude
, thanks to technology, we are going to have autonomous
cars
 and
busses
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 sooner or later and
while
 we can mention a few possible problems they'll cause, I believe there are many more reasons why we should employ them and indeed, they can be beneficial.
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