The map below show a school in 1985 and the school now

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The maps show a learning institution at two different times, the one on the left was in 1985 and the other is how it looks now.

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, the population of the school has grown remarkably from 1958 till now.

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, there has been a significant development in the map, involving the shape of the car park, and the road linking the entrance and the exit. New facilities

such

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as the pool, fitness

centre

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, and

the

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apply

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learning resource

centre

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are now available on the map as the size of the playing field has been reduced.

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with, the car park between the entrance to the school and the exit has changed from a rectangle to a circle same as the road connecting them.

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the office at the left top corner remains unchanged, the library, the small car park and

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classroom

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the classroom

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next to it have been removed to create space for the newly constructed learning resources

centre

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, within which the computer room is located. To continue with, the playing field has been decreased to allow for the new pool, fitness

centre

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as well as

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the two bigger classrooms just above it. ,

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Moreover

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,Moreover

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the 2- 2-storey

classroom

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block has been renovated and another storey was added to make it a 3-storey

classroom

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block.

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, trees have been planted at the

centre

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of the school just left of the new

classroom

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block

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, classroom with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

230 words

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