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Some people think that the environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. ag

In
this
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 current era, the whole world is dealing with environmental
problems
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due to
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 negligence towards nature over a long span of time. Some individuals believe global leaders should join and try to resolve these
problems
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,
while
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 others believe a nation should be allowed to deal with these situations in its own way. I will be discussing both viewpoints in the essay below and giving my opinion on solving these
problems
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 efficiently at the national
level
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 rather than globally. On the one hand, global organisations, like the United Nations, can set
policies
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 that can help all countries to combat global warming at similar
level
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. They have set certain criteria to mitigate raising carbon emission levels
due to
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 deforestation, industrialisation, and excessive vehicle use.
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, industries need to meet particular requirements all over the world, like keeping pollution
level
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 to minimum
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while
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 they need to be situated away from the residential
areas
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.
Therefore
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, now in countries like India, residential
areas
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 and industrial
areas
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 are now being separated so that proper steps can be taken to resolve the degradation happening to nature and natural resources from the waste products.
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, nations can create tailored
policies
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 that can reflect their unique environmental situations and cultures, leading to more effective local actions. Every country has its own limitations and strengths
while
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 trying to tackle these environmental
problems
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, which can be more effectively recognise by the local government.
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, Canada has unique advantage of landmass because of land-to-residential-area ratio,
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this
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, they can set industries away from residential
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 and have
policies
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 not to cut trees under any circumstances without permission from authorities.
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, carbon emissions are at the minimum
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 in Canada
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 geographically tailored
policies
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.
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, environmental
problems
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 are being resolved at the global and national
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, their effectiveness depends on how better they are being implemented at the local
level
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. In my opinion, local authorities have better understanding of their geography and they can implement better
policies
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 for the betterment of environment.

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Make sure your introduction clearly outlines your opinion at the end. This helps the reader know your position clearly.
coherence cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more smoothly between paragraphs by using linking words like 'however', 'moreover', and 'in conclusion'.
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Give more specific examples from your own knowledge or experience to support your points, as it would strengthen your argument.
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You have discussed both views clearly and provided examples to support your points, which is important for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-structured, making it easier to follow your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • global scale
  • nationally
  • cooperation
  • countries
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • specific
  • deforestation
  • waste management
  • global organizations
  • policies
  • combat
  • local actions
  • unique
  • situations
  • cultures
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