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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving exisitng public transport. Discuss both views and give your own pinion.

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Very
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big
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large
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 amount of people think that spending money
to
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on
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railway
 lines between cities is better than spending money
to
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on
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 public
transport
,
during
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while
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 others think
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the oppositely
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oppositely
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. One of the main issues nowadays is how arrive to
your
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at your
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 displacement as quickly as possible. It is
undenieable
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undeniable
 that
transport
 has
the
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an
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esspecially
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especially
 part of our life. But there
no
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is no
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 agreement on whether
to
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apply
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public
transport
 or
railway
 lines should be funded. A commonly held belief is that public
transport
 is more comfortable to move from one to second places. As evidence of
this
 point
to
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apply
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bus stations
ditributed
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contributed
 to
whole
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the whole
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 city.
Furthermore
, buses in way more than
trains
 and
this
 advantage will give them
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a decrease
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decrease
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decreased
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 time to arrive
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at significance
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significance
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significant
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place
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places
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. It could be explained by the fact that public
transport
 is the national heritage of
vast
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the vast
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 majority of
entire
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the entire
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 world.
As a result
 , it leads to evidence
funding
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of funding
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 public
transport
 as maximum as possible
On the other hand
, some people claim that
trains
 can
also
 be
main
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the main
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transport
, despite their size.
For example
, they may mention
that
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apply
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underground
trains
 so-called metro.
In
addition
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,addition
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trains
 are very very fast. The explanation lies
the
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in the
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 fact that
railway
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the railway
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 hasn't any traffic
jam
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jams
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,
very
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a very
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 small amount of
railway
 lights and average speed which
2
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is 2
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-3 times more than
bus
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the bus
a bus
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.
Therefore
, railways
also
 have
chance
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a chance
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to
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for
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 attention. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would argue that railways must advance like another
transport
 to move. Public
transport
 already
have
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has
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their
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its
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 ways,stations,
time
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and time
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shedule
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schedule
.I think new or improved railways will be
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more effectively
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effectively
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effective
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 than only improved public
transports
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transport
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.
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