Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, technology is provided at home, especially software.

However

, for software you need to agree with their condition,

that is

give permission to access your personal data. In

this

,essay I will present about cons and pros and in ,conclusion I will say that the pros outweigh the cons.

Firstly

, people should not worry about their security, because in their companies work pretty advocate employees and in any country, there is a law about

this

such

as penalty or even imprisonment for

this

crime.

Additionally

, it's profitable to you, they don't watch your data until the government say or you want to do

this

. And you can use the internet or other software calmly.

For instance

, you can give them the password to your information,

while

they ask about

this

On the other hand

this

has a large drawback,

such

as defending your secret data. Because they are usually exposed to cyber-attacks.

Moreover

, hackers in some qualified companies can hack the internet and take your secret information.

For example

, one guy hacks one of the most protected

software-Pentagon

Correct your spelling

software

show examples

Thus

he earned more than a billion dollars of selling their information. In conclusion, I disassembled two sides of

this

topic,

also

I reckon that the benefits outweigh the disadvantages.

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of town and cities than to build more housing . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Overall, men are more satisfied with local conditions than women.