Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, technology is provided at home, especially software.

However

, for software you need to agree with their condition,

that is

give permission to access your personal data. In

this

,essay I will present about cons and pros and in ,conclusion I will say that the pros outweigh the cons.

Firstly

, people should not worry about their security, because in their companies work pretty advocate employees and in any country, there is a law about

this

such

as penalty or even imprisonment for

this

crime.

Additionally

, it's profitable to you, they don't watch your data until the government say or you want to do

this

. And you can use the internet or other software calmly.

For instance

, you can give them the password to your information,

while

they ask about

this

On the other hand

this

has a large drawback,

such

as defending your secret data. Because they are usually exposed to cyber-attacks.

Moreover

, hackers in some qualified companies can hack the internet and take your secret information.

For example

, one guy hacks one of the most protected

software-Pentagon

Correct your spelling

software

show examples

Thus

he earned more than a billion dollars of selling their information. In conclusion, I disassembled two sides of

this

topic,

also

I reckon that the benefits outweigh the disadvantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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13Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

208 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people spend a lot of money celebrating personal family events, such as weddings and birthdays. How important is it to celebrate such events? Do you think people spend too much money on these events?

Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live.

Some young people are leaving countryside to live in cities or towns, it leaves only old people in countryside. What are the problems of this issue? What can be done to solve this problem?