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With the rise of ebooks comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#rise #ebooks #decline #paper #books #people #step #trend
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which
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 households
spend
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spent
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 their weekly
income
 in a country in 1968 and 2018.
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, in
first
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year
 compared to the
second
year
, people spent more on food, fuel and power, clothing and
foot ware
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footwear
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 and personal goods,
while
 in
second
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year
, they allocated their
income
 on housing, transport and leisure more than before.
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, household
good
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goods
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 expenditure
had
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 as much as
previous
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year
. In 1968, about 35% of
weekly
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the weekly
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income
 of a family was spent
for
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on
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 food which stood at the first level.
Then
 housing and clothing and
foot ware
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footwear
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 with 10% of
income
 were at the
second
 level. Fuel and power stood at just over 5% which was the lowest percentage. In 2018, Leisure had the highest level at about 22% and housing and food were in
the
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second
 and third place, respectively. (18% and 17%, respectively).
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, Household goods
remined
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remained
 constant at 8%
during
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 50 years. It can be seen clothing and
foot ware
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footwear
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, fuel and power
as well as
 personal goods stood around 4% in 2018 which experienced a fall of roughly 5% over the 50 years.
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