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Some young people look forward to a year of travelling, a 'gap year'; before they begin work or university and see it as a chance to broaden their horizons. For others this is an expensive waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, students have more opportunities to decide their time before beginning work or university. Some youngsters believe that a
gap
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 is a good opportunity for high school
graduates
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 to travel.
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, others disagree and think that it is a waste of valuable time. In my opinion, it is considered that students should choose
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year
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” if it has been planned perfectly and fully budgeted. On
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 hand, it seems a fair suggestion that there are a lot of advantages to
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year
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. Certainly,
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 stop depending on their parents and have more opportunities to become more independent and mature.
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, it is a great possibility to see
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, experience new cultures and meet various types
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.
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 have more time to think about their future
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 and make the right choice about their degree when they become mature in their thought.
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,
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 I have some sympathy for
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 view, it is
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 true that after
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, knowledge gained in high school before might be forgotten,
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 students can find difficulties during their studies.
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 forget basic mathematical knowledge
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they have not used in real life;
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, their study way might be affected. Another problem that can be seen is the financial aspect. It will take a lot of money to travel and people who follow the
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year
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 might use all of their savings for tourism.
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 leads to bankruptcy and inability to pay school fees. In conclusion,
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year
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 is a good option only if it is perfectly planned and requires many skills to budget the trips to avoid
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future financial problems.
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, any decision should be considered exactly to ensure
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 right future.
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