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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the distribution of the shares of electrical sources in different countries in 2003.
Overall
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, it could be seen that hydropower as the source of electricity is the most common in given countries,
however
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 nuclear power,
in contrast
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, was the least usable of the total in 2003.
According to
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 the figures, fossil fuel is the main supply of electrical energy in India and stood at 82%. In Vietnam that figure was less by 26% and accounted for 56%. The smallest proportion for fossil fuel was in
Sweden
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 with 4%.
It is clear that
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 hydropower was used by countries more than others. In
Morocco
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 it was the dominant source with 95% of the total which is almost two times more than in
Sweden
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 and Vietnam at 52% and 44%, respectively. In terms of nuclear
power
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 only
Sweden
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 and India used it in 2003 as a source of energy. In
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Sweden
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this
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 stake was 44% which more than in India by 4%.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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