Some people think that parents should be punished if their children commit crimes because they are responsible for their children's actions To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There has been an argument about whether
parents
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of criminals should be punished to pay for their kids'
wrong doings
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. I believe holding
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responsible would not make any positive changes and
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, I think they are being punished even without going to court.
Parents
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of people who commit crimes are usually punished even more than we can imagine.
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, they usually feel guilty and regretful both for ruining their children's lives and
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for the damage they've done to
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society.
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, they can not hold their heads up in their own
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and they are constantly being shamed by their
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.
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, they often will have to pay the price.
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, they need to bail their kids out with money or house documents, pay their debts and sometimes if they have grandchildren, raise them on their own even if they are old and unable to take care of themselves. With these in mind, I still don't think
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tormenting the family of the person
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fault, would have enough positive effect
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our society. Punishing has two sides in my view; One is personal and the other is public. It has to make the criminal, sorry for his actions and make him want to change for the better.
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, the public side of punishments
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there to teach the population that every action has its consequences.
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, punishing
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does not apply to any of the factors mentioned above and
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, it is pointless.
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, wanting
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to go to jail for the crime of their children, even though they are paying heavy prices in many other ways, is in my opinion, misleading and has no benefit for
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society and
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, I strongly disagree with
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scheme.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parental responsibility
  • Upbringing
  • Influence
  • Accountability
  • Ethically justifiable
  • Legal ramifications
  • Systemic issues
  • Community programs
  • Personal choice
  • Peer influence
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