Writing task 1 The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing task 1

The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of food that 2
groups
of students consume. The table below compares the general health details between 2 of them.
Overall
, we can see that the main
type
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that 2
groups
eat are ‘food with a high fat content’ and cereals.
Moreover
, fish is the least popular food for both of them.
Firstly
, for
group
A, the most eaten food is ‘cereals’ which is about 35% and is the same percentage as
group
B
. There is a big proportion
on
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‘food with a high fat content’ for
group
B
which is about 50% and 30% in
group
A.
Additionally
, there is a big difference in vegetables which is about 17% between the 2
groups
. For the fruit and vegetables, the numbers are almost the same. For the health details, there are only 10% of students who are overweight in
group
A and 20% in
group
B
. There is a gap between the percentage of illness in the past year as well that are about 5% and 12% for
group
A and
group
B
respectively.
Lastly
, the number of attendance at classes
are
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quite different between the 2
groups
which are 90% and 75% for
group
A and
B
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, group, b with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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