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Number if tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017)

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The graph shows the
number
 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, the
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
ships
 is lower than
Visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 at the beginning of
period
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the period
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 and fluctuate
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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. The
Visitors
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number of Visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 is higher than the starting point. Total Tourists visiting have dramatically grown to the end
period
. In 2010, the
number
 of tourists staying on
cruise
ships
 was 0.3
million
 and vary almost 0.5
million
 in 2011
while
 the
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 was nearly 0.7
million
 in 2010 and 2011. The
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 decreased by around 0.3
million
 in 2012 and suddenly declined by 0.5
million
 in 2013 to the end of the
period
 year.
While
 the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
 in 2014 was almost 1
million
, the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 was 2
million
. Between 2015 and 2016 the
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 and
Visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 were the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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