In the future, it may be scientifically possible for people to live for 150 years. This could be good news for individuals but it may have negative consequences for our world as a whole. What are the benefits and risks of people living to 150?

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ways
people
living 150
also
have
benefits
and risk. If
people
will
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live for 150
years
that is
good news for
also
have
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some negative consequences for our world as a whole. I think
this
have
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more
benefits
.
Firstly
, on the
adavanatage
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advantage
side, if a person will live 150
year
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years
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then
this
have
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so many
benefits
even
this
can be
a
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great good news for
public
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the public
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. If medicate facilities will increase
then
public health will
also
improve.
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, if a man like
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live
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lived
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for 150
years
who
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and
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help
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helped
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people
in getting things like education, job and many more if
this
types
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type
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of person
will live
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lived
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for
long
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a long
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period
than
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then
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it will be benefited
to
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the nation. The government should support science in improving health products because
this
have
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so many
advanatges
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advantages
which can make
society
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society's
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life easy
as well as
fast.
Thus
, as science is growing very fast
so
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it
can be
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is
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possible
that
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for
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people
can live for 150
years
.
Secondly
, There are even negative
effect
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effects
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like as
a
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the
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public will demand more and more goods and services. It is said
then
wants are unlimited but
resoucres
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resources
are limited so it can affect
on
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nature.
For instance
, if a community
will live
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lives
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longer and longer
then
they will use more and more which will affect on young generation
even
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.
Thirdly
,
However
, as
resoucres
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resources
are limited but wants are unlimited so it
affect
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affects
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on
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a whole nation.
To conclude
, the above information describes
about
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the advantages
as well as
disadvantages
about
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of
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the scientifically possible for
people
to live for 150
years
.
Hence
,
people
living for 150
years
can
have
benefits
as well as
risks.
According to
me
this
have
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benefits
.
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