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The maps show a school in 1985 and now

The maps show a school in 1985 and now
The two maps illustrate a school in 1985 and how it is now.
Overall
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, it could be seen that the old school environment has fewer amenities but presently has added infrastructures with some of the previous facilities still maintaining their old positions recently. To commence with, the main car park which has now taken the form of a
semi circle
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 is still at the Northern part of the school compound with its entrance and Exist points alongside the office space at its
right hand
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 side.
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, the road leading to the playing fields has been closed and replaced by some planted trees. Again, the library formerly in 1985 has been converted
to
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learning
Correct article usage
a learning
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 resource center
as well as
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computer
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a computer
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 room eliminating the small car park and classroom opposite it.
Furthermore
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, the playing fields
has
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have
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 been restructured to create a space for the pool and Fitness
centers
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centres
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.
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, the 2 storey study blocks
has
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have
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 been added another storey to make it a 3
high rise
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 building with additional two classroom structures.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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