The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.

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demonestrates

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demonstrates

percent

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percentage

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seal

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seals

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, wheels and

dolphines

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dolphins

in the

gormez

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Gormez

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straits during the period between 2006 and 2018.

Overall

Dolphines

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Dolphins

are the first

in increasing

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to increase

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their numbers,

while

whales have have steady state over the

giving

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given

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period. Seals

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,on

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the other hand, have started and ended with the same

numebrs

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numbers

number

. To illustrate, Seals had the largest record in 2006 and

then

decreased to reach almost

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apply

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similar numbers of

wheals

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wheels

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and

dolphines

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dolphins

However

, seals have gradually

grew

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to return to their starting record in 2008.

On the other hand

Dolphines

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Dolphins

have doubled their records from

year

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the year

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2006 to

year

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the year

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2008.

Submitted by noorawni on Tue Sep 26 2023

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

103 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Bar chart
Recorded
Gormez Straits
Fluctuation
Seals
Whales
Dolphins
Height
Individuals
Steadily declined
Relatively stable
Lowest
Significant increase
Approximately
Slight recovery

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The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable for and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will caused by this today and what can be done to solve these problems?

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