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The bar charts display the results from a 2009 survey regarding people’s automobile in a European country.

The bar charts display the results from a 2009 survey regarding people’s automobile in a European country.
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The bar charts display the results from a 2009 survey regarding
people
’s automobile purchasing habits in a European country.
Overall
, it can be seen that the majority of consumers tended to purchase a new car after five
years
 or more of using their old vehicle. Meanwhile, secondhand
cars
 were the most popular choice with
regards
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regard
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 to the type of vehicle purchased. The first bar chart shows that approximately 52% of
people
 in
this
 particular country changed
cars
 after 5 or more
years
, and roughly 37% changed
cars
 after 3-4
years
. About 5% of
people
 changed
cars
 every two
years
, 1% of
people
 changed every year, and approximately 3% of
people
 never changed.
Furthermore
, about 2% of
people
 didn’t even own a car. With regards to the type of vehicle purchased, approximately 68% of
people
 chose to buy second-hand
cars
,
while
 about 25% bought
brand new
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brand-new
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 vehicles.
In addition
, roughly 10% of
people
 sometimes
purchased
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purchase
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 either new or second-hand
cars
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, cars, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "display" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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