Your friend just had a baby. You decided to prepare a present for them. Write a letter and say : 1. Congratulate your friend 2. Ask when would be possible for you to visit 3. Ask what present they would like.

Hello Sarah, Hoping you are doing well. I am writing to offer my heartfelt congratulations on the baby. I knew that she was a baby girl. I felt glad to hear that you named her Kavi. You are undoubtedly a great mother, but you did a great job in the hospital.
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, I am planning a present for you and your girl as well. Just let me know which time is convenient for you to meet me. I will come to see you, I do not want to disturb you because it is really hard for a new mother to manage everything.
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, Kavi is only 20 days older, so it is not advisable to see people every day it may increase the chance of infections. You will let me know which gift you prefer to take for both of you.
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, I bought a mother bag for you so that you can use it on a daily basis. Not only
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, but I ordered small storage boxes for Kavi, which are useful as well. Congratulations again on everything.
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hear from you soon. Yours loving, Saman.

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task achievement
The introduction is friendly, but consider expressing your excitement more openly to improve the emotional tone.
coherence cohesion
The letter could benefit from clearer separation of ideas. For example, discussing the visit separately from the gift could enhance clarity.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a warm and friendly tone throughout your letter, which is appropriate for the context.
complete response
You included all the required elements: congratulations, request for meeting, and inquiry about the present.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • heartfelt congratulations
  • bundle of joy
  • adjustment period
  • suitable time
  • cherished gift
  • newfound responsibilities
  • practical assistance
  • joyous occasion
  • unwavering support
  • looking forward
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