people have difference visions about shopping online some of them encourage and others says its disadvantage outweigh their advantage, what is your opinion?
These days, the development of technology has led to buying
stuff
online becoming a habit in society. While
some people tend to suggest it, others believe that it has more drawbacks rather than benefits. It is my belief that purchasing things from the Internet has advantages that surpass its disadvantages for the following reasons.
On the one hand, online shopping could save more time
and energy rather than buying straight from the store. For example
, customers need to spare their time
to take a trip to the store, not to mention
the money they spend on gas or public transportation tickets. Meanwhile, online shopping does not need customer presence, they only need to log into shopping platforms and choose everything they would like to buy without having any interaction with the staff. In this
case, online shopping is more convenient for busy people.
On the other hand
, online shopping lacks in customers' experience to feel the materials or to at least do a trial of the stuff
they want to buy. Although
reviews from former customers are provided on the platform, it does not mean everybody will accept them since the reviews are written based on the opinion of the reviewer only. So online shopping would likely cause more disappointment after the stuff
is received by the customer.
After taking everything into consideration, I would say online shopping has more benefits for the sake of time
. Moreover
, the occurrence of bad stuff
I mentioned above could be avoided by taking more time
to read the review of the products.Submitted by pocutarifahzahrina on
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