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The graphs below show the number of marriages and divorces in the USA between 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below show the number of marriages and divorces in the USA between 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The
given
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apply
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pie
chart
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 illustrates
the
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apply
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information
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 about
marriages
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 and divorces and the
another
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other
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chart
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 describes about marital status of adults in
Americans
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America
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,
the
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in the
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 period between 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, the two charts
portrice
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portray
different
kind
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kinds
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 of
information
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 but the
information
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 city is
same
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the same
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. The first
chart
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 show the
information
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 about number of
USA
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US
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 person
get
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who got
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 married and divorced during the period from 1970 to 2000.
In the
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The
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year
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years
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 1970 and 1980
show
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,show
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 the same level of
marriages
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 but the divorces
are
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apply
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varied
1
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between 1
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and 1.5
millons
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million
millions
.And
the
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in the
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 following years
of
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apply
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1990 and 2000 the number of
marriages
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take
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taking
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 place
are
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was
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 slightly
same
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the same
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. But the
divoreces
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divorce
divorces
 rate face low
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while
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when
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comparing
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compared
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 to the year 1980.During the period of
survey
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the survey
a survey
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 the
year
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,year
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 1980 shows
the
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a
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 high rate of
marriages
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 2.5
millions
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million
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 and
high
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a high
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 rate of divorces 1.5
millions
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million
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. Now coming to the second
chart
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it
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apply
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deliver the
information
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 about marital status of
americans
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Americans
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of
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in
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 two years 1970 and 2000. In 1970 the percentage of adults who
doesn't
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didn't
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 get married
is
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was
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 lower than
comparing
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compared
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 to 2000
is
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apply
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15%and 20%.The
Amercians
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Americans
 who get married in their adult age are high in both
te
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the
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 years and the
percentsge
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percentage
 is 70 and 60. The widows and divorced adults
are almost shows
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are almost shown
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 the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, information, marriages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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