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The line graph gives information about a number of using of public transportation system by different ages and location of dwellers in 2016.

The line graph gives information about a number of using of public transportation system by different ages and location of dwellers in 2016.
#line #information #transportation #system #ages #location #dwellers
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The graph depicts information about
a
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the
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 number of
using
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uses
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 of folk transportation
system
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systems
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 by various ages and places of dwellers in 2016. The units are measured in millions
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, it is noticeable that
car
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cars
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 will be the highest used transport ,
while
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bus
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the buses
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 lowest.
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, car and train will show an upward
trends
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,
whereas
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 bus downward .
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carscar
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cars car
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, they accounted for under 6 which rose marginally to 7 before maintaining the same level during the next 10 years.
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, it will increase progressively and will reach a peak of 9 in 2030 and will be the highest-used transport throughout the period. In terms of
bus
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buses
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, it dropped steadily from 4 to 3 in 2020 and will fall to under 3 in the final years.
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, it will be the smallest used transportation system over the period in question. With regards to train, it accounted for roughly 2 which went up to 3 in 2000 before maintaining the same level from 2000 to 2010.
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, it will rise extremely to 5 in the final years and will be the second
used
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most used
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 transportation system after cars.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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