The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.
This
bar chart depicts the digit number
of three kinds of ocean life organisms in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. It is clear from the graph that, the number
of dolphins
has constantly increased over the years.while
whales
have similar numbers.
According to
what is shown,in 2006, seals have recorded a her number
than other categories , which is nearly half, while
dolphins
and whales
accounted for 15 and 24 . Over the next four years , the population numbers have similar levels.However
, the number
of seals has declined to 25 . While
there was a slight increase in the number
of whales
around 26 , and approximately 21
have been found dolphins
.
Furthermore
, in 2014,a gradual decline has been reported from 25 to 21, as numbers of whales
population, as well as
for the seas.In contrast
,dolphins
have increased modestly over 30 . In the last
four years, dolphins
had a higher rate than other species that reported more than half.While
the whale's number
was the least.
To sum up
, we could say that dolphins
have ranked the highest number
among these species followed by seals.Submitted by du.sg16 on
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