The chart shows the top eight honeymoon destination for newlywed British couples in 2010. The results come from a survey of 5, 000 couples.

The chart shows the top eight honeymoon destination for newlywed British couples in 2010. The results come from a survey of 5, 000 couples.
The chart represents the outcome of a study made on 5, 000 newly married couples in Britain in the year 2010 of eight topmost honeymoon destinations.
Overall
, it is evident that Thailand and Bali were the
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visited countries
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Spain and the Lake District were the least toured.
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with, the number of newlyweds who visited Thailand and Bali from the total of couples researched
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were 1,410 and 1,335 respectively making them the highest recording location for honeymoon. These were followed by those preferring Costa Rica at 750 people and those patronizing the Maldives being 600 married people.
Furthermore
, out of the 5,000 partners sampled, it turned out that the Lake District was the lowest of the nations explored for fun at just 124 of these people and 140
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the Spanish
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also
, freshly married who chose
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Paris as their destination for pleasure were 209.
Finally
, the Greek Islands were patronized by 432 of these surveyed recently wedded couples.
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