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Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. it would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, children spend too much time in front of the screen. They must be encouraged to participate in outdoor
activities
, especially
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sports
 ones. I fully
agree
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this
 argument because
advantages
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 of
sports
activities
 are countless,
while
 mental and physical health are strictly correlated with movement.
Firstly
, physical condition is
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 correlated with human interaction.
Sports
activities
 are a great opportunity to meet other people with the same interests. Team
sports
 mainly, help people to get into a resolution easier which is a great skill for a future adult life.
Moreover
, movement requires endurance which
strengthen
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the psychic. During their lifetime,
kids
 can face a variety of problems and a strong mental condition can help them overcome difficulties more easily.
Secondly
,
sports
 help
kids
 to grow their muscles and bones. Childhood is a period of fast growth and without muscular support, back-spine problems can occur more easily. During that period of time, a lot of parents were concerned about
kids
 who could develop irreversible spine curves.
Sports
, regardless of
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 it is,
practiced
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 right and under supervision, help young adults to maintain
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good posture during their lifetime. In conclusion, outdoor
activities
 have multiple advantages during childhood and
kids
 must be encouraged to practise them
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 because they can influence their condition for the rest of life.
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