Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
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think that in scientific study, business and
academic
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world,
information
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should be shared as much as possible.
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, others say there is
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that is
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so crucial that it has to be kept confidential. On the one hand, I agree that there is
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which
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to be known by as many
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as possible,
such
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as results of past
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research
researches
, studies and experience.
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, with
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already-provided
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in
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field, researchers are able to discover new things
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and answer questions which used to be insoluble puzzles in the past.
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,
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can take
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of these
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.
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, a man can use
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of other businessmen to run a company, a housewife can gain knowledge through the internet, and use them in daily life, to avoid the risk of
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explosion,
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.
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, using experience and knowledge,
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have the ability to make the education system better and create a greater future for mankind.
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, there is
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that is
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too important to be released.
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, if
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data
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of a company is leaked, its opponents may use it as a tool to
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difficulties for itself. There are
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scientific studies which are too shocking
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may cause confusion
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and fear among
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in
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society.
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, these can cause a false image of an event, a subject, or even someone's life philosophy. In
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conclusion
, I believe that
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field, academy, and business should be widely known as much as possible, as it
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life to be better,
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, shocking
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and crucial
data
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should be kept confidential.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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