The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram shows a guideline for the production mechanism for producing
sugar
from sugar
cane.
As an overview, this
guideline demonstrates making sugar
over a 7-step process. This
process contains five industrial steps that use different equipment.
At the beginning of the process, the sugar
cane was planted. When they are growing 12 to 18 months, farmers start harvesting them. Afterwards, sugar
cane is crushed by an industrial supply and the juice
will come out of it. Consequently
, the juice
should be purified by the filter. In the fourth step, the limestone filter does the purifying task.
For the next step, to make the resulting juice
become syrup
, it needs to evaporate. This
juice
evaporates in the evaporator with the help of the heat and therefore
becomes syrup
. In terms of the sixth step, the centrifuge, industrial equipment for separating things, separates sugar
crystals from the syrup
. Finally
, this
syrup
dries and cools and produces the final sugar
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