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the world would be much better if there was only one government Do you agree or disagree

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, the
world
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prefer
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 to
control
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 by unique
power
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 rather than independent
government
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.
This
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essey
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essay
 believes that more disadvantages sides than
advantage
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advantages
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 sides.
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this
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essey
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essay
 will discuss the pros of
one
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government
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 and
secondly
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 will mention
that
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the cons of
such
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case
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. It is right that there are some
benefit
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single
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a single
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government
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. Nowadays, all of us are
concerning
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concerned with
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 global
issues
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 and
also
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environment
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the environment
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. If the
world
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 is controlled
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one
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power
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, it might find out some solution to prevent global
issues
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 and to save
environment
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the environment
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 from different
kind
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kinds
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 of pollution.
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, New Times Magazine
is
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apply
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reported that
development
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the development
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 of new
country
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countries
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 or
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government
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governments
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is
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has
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lead
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led
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 to
increase
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an increase
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26
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%
of
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in
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 environmental problems and global
issues
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 .
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,
controlling
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control
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 by unique
power
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is lead
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leads
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 the problems
such
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 as culture,
religion
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 and
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also
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apply
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language
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 . We know that
,
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 there are
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religion
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religions
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 for each country . If the
world
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 is controlled
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one
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by one
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power
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,
it
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there
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 might
happen
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be
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the
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a
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 conflict between
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religion
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religions
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. Because there are different
contrast
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contrasts
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 in existing
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religions
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religion
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among
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in
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world
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. Conflicting between religions
is happened
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happens
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 the big wars and it can be
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 for all humanity.
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also
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 we can see
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 problems, so, we might face the challenge
to choose
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of choosing
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formal
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a formal
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language
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one
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government
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. It is very difficult.
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,
International
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the International
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 Survey Organization in 2017 reported that
had
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 more than 200 existing
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religion
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religions
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 and active
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language
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languages
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. In conclusion, controlling
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world
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the world
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 by unique
power
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 has both advantages and disadvantages. The pros
is
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are
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 that
not
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it not
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 only
to prevent
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prevents
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issues
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,
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apply
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 but
also
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to save
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saves
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environment
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the environment
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 from pollution.
And the
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 cons is that
to
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it
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lead
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leads
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into
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to
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the
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a
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 conflict between
religion
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 and
language
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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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