The cultures of many countries around the world becomes more similar than they used to be. What are the reasons for this trend? Is it positive or negative?
Nowadays, the traditions in many regions of the world are becoming identical if we compare them to the past.
This
is happening because of ease of the transport as well as
the global reach of communities through an easily available internet connection. However
, these changes are welcomed in various progressive aspects by the humankind.
First of all, talking about the reasons, due to
the vast advancement in the travel system over the past few decades, people are migrating to every possible corner of the world, and exchanging their cultures with local communities. Additionally
, the technical progress that humans have accomplished is connecting every last
individual to the latest trends, and fashions. Hence
, customs are getting shared to a large extent globally. For instance
, last
year, the president of America lit a white house with lamps on the occasion of the Diwali festival which is an Indian tradition.
Secondly
, as a result
of these customs exchanges many countries have started developing in a positive direction. Moreover
, such
exchange has paced the progress of a few average regions in terms of law, fashion, trade, and the happiness of their citizens. Although
a number of nations opposed these globally welcomed alterations, we cannot deny the fact that such
things are bringing stability and peace to the world. The Middle Eastern country, Saudi Arabia, for example
, has accepted new trends of globalization and altered many policies accordingly
to be a future-ready nation.
To conclude
, the mixing of cultures is never a never-ending process, and the latest communication, as well as
transportation ,mediums are contributing to making this
even larger. Consequently
, an acceptable development can be seen in many countries which is good for humanity.Submitted by ravirajole on
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