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In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that governments should levy a higher tariff on junk
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 because the number of health risks associated with
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 type of
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 is rising.
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 essay agrees that a higher tax should be paid by the fast
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 companies.
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 more expensive prices would stop people from consuming fast
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.
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, the raised money could be used to improve public health. Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption. Fast foodstuff companies would pass on these taxes to consumers in the form of higher prices, leading to people not being able to afford junk
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 as it has become too pricey.
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, fast
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 would soon become a luxurious item and it would only be consumed occasionally.
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, it would be less harmful to the general public’s strength.
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, the cost of organic
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 is the main reason why only a small percentage of the population can purchase it regularly. Free medical clinics can be opened up and equipped where patients who are suffering from diseases associated with fast
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 can receive free service.
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, The payment can be used to run campaigns warning
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 about the dangers of fast
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 abuse. The UK is a prime example where money from fast
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 goers is used to treat stomach cancer
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 it is pumped into health campaigns in schools warning students about fast
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 ramifications. In conclusion, fast
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 should be taxed at a higher rate because of the fact that increased cost should reduce the amount of junk
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 people buy and the general community’s well-being can benefit from
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 money. It is
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 recommended that authorities make
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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