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Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

#life #development
Adevertisings
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Advertisings
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 are becoming the most well-known things in
normally
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 life. These sentences are absolutely true for everything being
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otherones
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others
, and
otherthings
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other things
 to become more popular in the world. In my,
however
, I partially
agree
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 these phrases. On the one hand,
advertisments
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advertisements
 are beneficial for many individuals at
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some
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 point which is always
helpfull
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helpful
 to find
correctly
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products
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from
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 the
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Internet
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internet
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, and they aid
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 more time by shopping that always
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a list
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list
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 of
charecteristcs
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characteristics
 to choose quickly and
suffeciently
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sufficiently
such
 as airpods,
smortphones
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smartphones
,
smart watches
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smartwatches
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, and generally developing gadgets like
softwre
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software
 update or the
lastest
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latest
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 version of computer
sytems
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systems
, and at the same time, they will not pay for them which
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dramatically
grammatically
 equal to
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 outcomes
,
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 and debt.
In addition
, there
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no
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 so many people, and everything works for
cunsumer's
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consumer's
consumers
 wish.
On the other hand
, all of them seem that not many
thing
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 are correct
,
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 since
announcemets
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announcements
announcement
 can appear
most
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 children, and activate their
deisre
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desire
 to consume
in
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the broadcast's product,
in
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this
 parent who should pay
for satisfying
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to satisfy
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 children's wish
that is
 so gorgeous way to kill children's normal feeling. Insist of paying for
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desire
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, adults can investigate
that
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 value of money for pupils' future. Despite of
well
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good
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 quality of products, there are
also
 artificial advertisements,
ans
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and
 products to buy as real, and good sort of
commodity
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commodities
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. In conclusion, in my view, announcements do not always work with
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,
additionally
, there are several drawbacks for individuals. In most cases, they try to
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deceive
,
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 and encourage us to pay for their product.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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