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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban countries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Certain groups of individuals ponder that big agencies and management should go outside big cities in other nations. In my opinion, there are several pros pursual cons. In
this
 essay, I will explain my point of view
along with
 some relative examples and supportive evidence. To commence with, there are numerous merits of any enterprise to move small community to very big country.
Firstly
, they can easily sell their products, increase their share, and become a brand very easily because they found many people who want to buy their products very costly.
For instance
, the majority of farms settle their enterprise abroad
such
 as in the UK, Australia, Canada and many more.
Secondly
, they become more popular and get new orders for their organizations.
Lastly
, big companies get promoted smoothly without any hurdles abroad.
For example
, if the Indian company moved to the USA
then
 they get very easily promotion and help of local communities. Ostensibly, there are some demerits of moving a big farm's small nation to a large nation. they encounter some difficulties
such
 as not generating revenue, and not finding cheaper labour
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 and land for their farm which is very costly.
Moreover
, they find it uncomfortable to adjust weather and situations of other nations. Eventually, they are forced to give large amounts of money as tax to other nations. To give an overview, some large farms move from small areas to large areas
then
 they get high rewards.
While
 there are some drawbacks
also
 their
therefore
 they need to consider all the scenarios as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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