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Transport Perefences Among Young people in four country

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The bar graph illustrates details about the transport preferences of young people in four different countries. Namely the UK,the US,
France
,
Italy
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and Italy
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 in 2000.
Overall
,
It is clear that
 the car rates
showed
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are
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 higher than
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 in four different countries
To begin
 with
the
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apply
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Italy
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Italy's
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 car rates
elucidate
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are
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 70% higher
rather
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apply
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than
figure
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a figure
the figure
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of
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for
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France
. Looking at the information,
France
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France's
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 bicycle value demonstrated almost fourth as high as the diagram of Italy. The same pattern followed in
France
 about
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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.
According to
 the index of the UK and the US showed the equal number approximately 60% among cars of youngster in 2000. As opposed to
USA
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the USA
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, young people ride bicycles much more in
UK
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the UK
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 ,
30
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with 30
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% relatively
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