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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Many opinions consider that sophistication can be lost whether catch the profits from tourist,
,
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however
 part of the general public believe that tourism is the potential way to conserve the culture. I agree that the fact that culture will be destroyed if tourism becomes earnings but
also
 agree that
this
 is the main way for the permanence of culture. On the one hand, the state should care more about the fact that historical
relics
 belong to the nation not
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 the localities. In my own experience, the tourist is not the only one to visit the attractions so they have the obligation to protect the assets of the nation. The government should exhibit the rules for tourists in every destination which
is have
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 the mission
that is
preserve
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relics
. Nowadays, the
travellers
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 is increasing each year is increasing, so that travel place which luckily has
relics
 attracts a huge of residents to visit.
This
 may lead to some situations
such
 as robbery, broken facilities,…
On the other hand
, the general public
also
 believes that if the existence of national
resources
 were not witnessed by anyone, there would probably be no recognition of the precious
resources
 of any country.
Therefore
, it is essential for national
resources
 to be put on display
as well as
 open up opportunities for visitors to know more information about the history of that country. From there, they will
also
 be more aware of the protection of environmental
resources
. All in all, everything has two faces when they are given to the general public. I believe that
this
 should be more strictly in law for the touristy not to destroy the
relics
.

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