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some people believe that culture will be ruined if it used to earn tourism revenu, but other think that tour ism is the only way to protecting culture. discuss both sides and give you opinion.

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Many individual think that if
culture
 be used to earn money from
tourism
, it will be ruined.
Whereas
other
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others
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believed
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 that
tourism
 can protect the
culture
. in my opinion,
i
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I
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 agree with the second idea. Some people
belive
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believe
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 that
culture
 will be ruined if it is used to earn
tourism
 revenue.
This
 can be true because the
culture
 may be not pure anymore.
This
 can
be explain
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 that
individual
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individuals
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 often
use
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uses
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culture
 as
the
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a
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 monetization
tools
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tool
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, not because they love it and want to share
with
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it with
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tourist
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tourists
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. For
exmaple
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example
,
Hoi
 An ancient
town
 still
as
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in
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 the same form
when
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as when
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 it was built. Clearly, there is no reparation or reconstruction
on
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of
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Hoi
 An ancient
town
 and it
is being
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has been
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 destroy
a
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apply
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little by little
through
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throughout
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 out years.
On the other hand
,
i
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I
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 believe that
tourism
 is the only way
protecting
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to protect
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culture
.
Culture
 only
show
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shows
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 that
it
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isit
wasit
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 still valuable when it can help people to make money.
For instance
,
Hoi
An
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is An
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 ancient
town
 and many tourist
attraction
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attractions
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 that make a lot of money for
individual
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individuals
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 who live there. If
Hoi
 An ancient
town
 can not use to earn revenue anymore, it will
be destroy
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be destroyed
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 to make another useful construction. In conclusion,
although
 many people still think that
culture
 will be ruined because of
tourism
,
i
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I
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 believe that tourist activity is the best way to keep
culture
 not to
be destroy
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be destroyed
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 and make some income.
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