It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (eg. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should stop this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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it is a fact, some

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or insects have disappeared since the creation of the Earth. Some

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believe that

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is a natural process

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it is accentuated by humans. There are some steps

people

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can take to prevent

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from happening even faster than it should. In

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essay, I will explain why

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should make an effort to slow it down. To start with, the pollution in the air has become hotter and harder these

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years, with the effect of greenhouse gas

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deforestation and more humanity,

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have no alternative than to go to a place with the same climate that they used to be. In May 2022, the Parisiens

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could see an orca in “ La Seine”. The Marine

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came all

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way to find cooler water than in the Ocean Pacific. Unfortunately, it died two days later even though the scientists tried to help it. There was not enough food for

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kind of animal in the river. Not all the species are gonna be capable of adapting fast enough to avoid extinction and a lot of them should die. Another factor to consider

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is hunting

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which are roughly used in the fashion industry or cosmetics for their body like skin, fat, hair and many other things.

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, the whales were overfished

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century and many species are now endangered. Since 1930 whale species have been protected by international pacts. After those ones, in 1978 the

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whaling company active in Australia closed.

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, it is obvious that humans are playing a major role in extinct

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through overfishing, greenhouse gas, and pollution.

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, if every single person tried to use their car, eat less meat, lower the thermostat, and buy fewer clothes or make-up, that would help to slow down the faster extinction that the Earth has ever seen.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

inevitability
ecological balance
biodiversity
ecosystem services
deforestation
pollution
overhunting
interdependent
cascading effect
evolutionary biology
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Many people depend on their smartphones and other electronic devices for communication, work, and entertainment. To what extent do you think that this reliance on technology is affecting interpersonal relationships and face-to-face communication?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?