The diagram shows how fruit is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The process diagram depicts information about how
fruit
is canned. Overall
, it can clearly be seen that there is a lot of process that can be divided into four main points.
First thing first,
the fruit
in the garden picked
by Add a missing verb
is picked
the
hand and put Correct article usage
apply
it
in the basket. The Correct pronoun usage
apply
fruit
that has been picked will be lifted onto the truck and transport
Wrong verb form
transported
them
to the factory. Once the Correct pronoun usage
apply
fruit
is arrived
, Change to the active voice
arrives
has arrived
they
will washed Correct pronoun usage
it
by
a lot of water. Change preposition
with
Then
, the fruit
will be checked by magnifying
glass. After that, they will move to the cold Add an article
a magnifying
the magnifying
storing
to have a high temperature. Replace the word
storage
Then
, the fruit
is graded by the scales and peel them
before they Wrong verb form
peeled
will
Verb problem
are
remove
by the skin which is coring. Wrong verb form
removed
Finally
, after skin
is Add an article
the skin
being
removed, it is time to Unnecessary verb
apply
slicing
into pieces and put it in the can.
Can which has already Wrong verb form
slice it
fruit
in it will sealed to make it sterile and cooked in
a high temperature to make Change preposition
at
them
longer expired. Correct pronoun usage
it
Then
, before they move to the storage, each can will be labelling
and Wrong verb form
labelled
finally
they are ready to distribute to the supermarket by truck.Submitted by aulia2207nadila on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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