Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some individuals opine that there is
necessity
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the necessity
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of adopting
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to adopt
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measures for overcoming unlawful activities,
whereas
,others insist that there is no need to
acquire
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take
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further
steps
.As far as my opinion is concerned, I firmly we have tremendous actions to overcome these offences.In
this
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I will discuss both and give my opinion in conclusion. Foremost,
believer
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the believer
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of
first
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the first
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view suggests countermeasures should
be implement
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on citizens
for overcoming
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to overcome
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crime
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the crime
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rate.Admittedly,
by
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apply
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taking action
such
as higher compensation, hefty penalties and
deter
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deterring
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the consequences of doing illegal acts can
reduces
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reduce
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the
overall
crime
rate .
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, one of our
classmate
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classmates
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robe
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robbed
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our fellow
our
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of our
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money so our
principle
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principal
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decide
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decided
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to
expell
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expel
that student from school
for
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to
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make
a
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example for other students to instil the result of doing
crime
. On the other point of view,
instead
of tackling crimes communities should collaborate with authorities.It has been
seemed
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seen that
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the cause behind 90 percent
crime
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of crime
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is not being able to fulfil the necessities
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adults
,
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and,unpayable
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unpayable
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the unpayable
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fee of college for that citizens should help each other.
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,during
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COVID-19
Covid
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it has
assumed
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been assumed
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that
crime
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the crime
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rate dramatically increased
due to
unemployment.
To sum up
,
by
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apply
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making strict laws and regulations and taking
strengthen
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steps
for
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to
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following
steps
is not
solely
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solution ,
in contrast
, we should
also
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steps
for needy
peoples
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people
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.
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