You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Sir/Madam, After having seen your advertisement in a brochure on the 28th September about seven days of hiking in the mountains, I would like to take part in
this
trip.
However
, I have a few concerns regarding
this
which I will expatiate later.
To begin
with, I am interested in
this
one-week walking tour in the hills because of my dream of hiking.
Secondly
, I want to explore the world
as well as
feel the peace of mountains.
Lastly
, I would like to stay away from the fast-paced world and
this
is the perfect time as I have off from college. Apart from that, I am looking at your pamphlet but I couldn't find
such
as the exact price of the tour, a list of important items, or any medical emergency benefits which help me to get ready in advance.
Also
, could you please tell me the proper date for hiking so I can focus on my health as well? On the other side, I am a little concerned about my health as I feel tired easily because of weakness in my body
due to
the death of my loved ones.
However
, I already talked to my doctor if I should drop the plan
this
time and he said there is nothing to worry about, In fact, it helps to recover fast. If require any
further
information, please feel free to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Gurpinder Kaur
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