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In the future nobody will not buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
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people
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 can read
books
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. Some
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 claim that reading
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for
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effect
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on
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some businesses
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 not acceptable,
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 groups believe that online information not only is easy
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 but
also
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free. In my opinion, I agree with
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books
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significant
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 advantage
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paper
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Some
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 of
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people
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 jobs have
direct
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 of these products so if we restrict these activities they will be jobless.
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 influence on some jobs who are provide papers.
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On the other hand
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, some individuals maintain
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the
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people
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 would like to spend less money and online data is provided on
internet
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the internet
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 or Apps free and they are not
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able
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 of
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 or book. In
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 of
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line
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 data has
less
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 costs for
costumers
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customers
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.
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In my opinion, I advocate processing of
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 is higher than imagination so
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 of data
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shortest
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 time is
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a requirement
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 of
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. We have to change plenty of methods that
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side
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Conclusion
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the fact some
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online
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
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 some groups have
agreement
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 on online
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newspaper
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 and
books
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 for free reason. I strongly believe that new
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need
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changed
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 older views so online
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 is acceptable.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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