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Your parents will be celebrating their 40th anniversary next month. You are planning a big celebration, but you are not sure how to make the occasion really memorable. Write to your best friend, Joan, who is a professional event planner. In your letter: explain why the occasion is special ask for her assistance set up a time to meet at your friend's convenience to discuss your plans

Dear Joan. I am writing to you regarding the celebration of my
parents
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parents'
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 40th
anniversay
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anniversary
 next month. It is an extremely special
ocation
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occasion
 for the whole family, since my brother
that
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 lives overseas and many other relatives around the nation are coming to the party.
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,
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 is an once in a blue moon event, I mean, you do not celebrate 40 years of marriage every year.
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, I want everybody to have a memorable event.
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, I would appreciate
if
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 you could give me
you
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 professional advice.
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, I know my mother and father would be enchanted if you were the one in charge of the
organization
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 of
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important
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 event.
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 is because
,
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 they loved what you did when I got married four years ago. I
supose
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suppose
 that you have many things to do
in
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these
days
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 so please let me know when
can I
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I can
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 go to your office or
where ever
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 you can receive me to talk about
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 magnificent
ocation
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occasion
. I am available
for
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next
monday
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Monday
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 between 17:00 and 20:00. Looking forward to
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 you soon. Best wishes. Tomás Alcaide

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coherence and cohesion
Proofread for spelling mistakes, especially in 'anniversary' and 'occasion'.
coherence and cohesion
Break longer sentences into shorter ones for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph stays focused on a single idea.
task achievement
You expressed your feelings well about the occasion being special.
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The tone of your invitation is polite and friendly.
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