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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about the average monthly
change
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 in value of commodities
consist
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 of
copper
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, nickel and zinc in 2014.
Overall
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, three commodity categories are experienced downward throughout
of
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apply
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the months. Looking at details, the
change
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 in the
price
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 of nickel at began 6% in January and it
remained
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apply
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declined
at
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to
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 1% in March.
Then
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, the figure plummeted
at
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to
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 -3% in June.
Moreover
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,
this
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 trend increased gradually
at the end
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 of the year at 1%. Followed by the other type of commodity is
copper
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. The
change
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 in the value of
copper
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 started at 2% and
then
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 experienced a gradual decrease until June.
In addition
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, the
change
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of
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in
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price
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 increased to 1% in July and
then
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 levelled off until September.
Finally
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, the
change
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 in
price
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 of
copper
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 reached
out
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2%
at the end
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 of the year. The
last
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 metal category is zinc. The
change
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 in the
price
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 of zinc began at 1% in January. In the next month, it went up to the peak amount
at
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of
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 3% and
then
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 dropped gradually until June. In the next five
month
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months
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, the
change
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 in the
price
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this
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of this
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 metal remained stable. After that, the
change
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 in the
price
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 jumped by the end of the period to 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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