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Some people think that children should start school sooner while others believe ‎they should not start it before seven. Discuss both views, and give your own ‎opinion.‎

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While
 some people assume that
children
 should start
school
 at an early
age
, others admit that should not start before seven. There are different thoughts about starting the education of
children
. In
this
 ,essay we will argue some opinions of different people. On the one hand, starting
school
 at an early
age
 is beneficial for
children
. Through,
this
 they will learn new things meet new
children
 and develop their social life. At an early ,
age
children
 are very sharp at picking up things as compared to older
age
. Going to
school
 will make a routine for their daily life. If their parents are servants or doing any job,
this
 will be manageable for them too,
therefore
, they will be free after sending their
children
 to
school
.
According to
 recent research at the University of Texas,
children
 who start
school
 sooner are more intelligent than
children
 who start
school
 after seven.
On the other hand
, starting
school
 at a later
age
 sometimes they don't want to go to
school
 enthusiastically, by reason of, he/she has spent most of their time with their parents. Because they start
school
 at a later
age
 they are unable to adjust to the
school
 environment. Their teacher must treat them specifically and encourage them to
come
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school
 regularly and focus on their study. In my opinion, starting of early
age
 education is the best choice for parents. At an early ,
age
children
 can pick up more things and can easily adjust to a different environment. One of the most important benefits of starting
school
 at an early
age
 they will complete their higher education degree and go to the next level. In conclusion, starting
school
 sooner far outweighs starting
school
 after seven.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Early education
  • Foundational skills
  • Cognitive abilities
  • Discipline and routine
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Developmental pace
  • Unstructured play
  • Competitive advantage
  • Academic exposure
  • Educational systems
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